Monday, September 21, 2020

Comment Wall for A Monster's Bond

 


Hi there!

This is the comment wall for my portfolio, A Monster's Bond.

Feel free to leave comments here about my work from the portfolio, and if you want to have a discussion, you can enable notifications for responses, since I'll be responding to all comments I get!

Artwork of a dragon by Alok Ranjan

13 comments:

  1. Hi CJ, I really loved your story of the three roses. Earlier in the semester I read someone’s edition of this story based on OU’s campus, and so I decided to read the original story myself. I The pictures you included really helped me picture what these monsters looked like. Your story also included a lot of detail which made it easy and interesting to read! Your author’s note was a great addition to better understand your reasoning for writing the story. I did not notice the things in “threes” before you mentioned it, and I like how you added more aspects involving three in your version of the story. Great job! I look forward to reading more of you writing.

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    1. Hi Natalia!
      I'm super happy to hear you enjoyed my Three Roses story!
      It's great that the pictures helped you get a grasp for what the monsters look like!
      I'm glad that the details helped make the story an easy and interesting read, and that my author's note helped provide some insight into how I wrote the story and highlighted some details you might not have otherwise noticed!
      Thank you very much, I hope you enjoy my other work as much as you enjoyed this story!

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  2. Hi CJ!

    I loved your three roses story. My favorite childhood story growing up was Beauty and the Beast which after reading your story realized there was the inspiration! I appreciated that you kept a lot of the story the same. This story is very easy to alter but there is some beauty in the original story that I think can easily get lost in translation. I liked how many pictures you included for two reasons. One, it made the story seem like it was moving a lot faster. When you get certain folk tales, you can get bogged down in the details and fancy words, but being able to see what the monster looked like and how it changed through different people's eyes, was really cool. Second, it allowed the reader different adaptations. I thought of the beast more as the second picture and I think it is interesting that someone else had the same thought and drew it out but also allowed others to have differing thoughts.

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    1. Hi Brynlee!
      Thank you very much!
      I'm glad that you enjoyed me keeping the story more true to its roots, and that the pictures were helpful to you! The old adage "a picture is worth a thousand words" really is true after all!

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  3. Hi CJ!

    I really enjoyed your interpretation of The Three Roses. I liked to see the motivation behind the three girls, like how one wanted to catch the eye of a prince with her gift, one wanted to attract a wealthy lord, and the third wanted to brighten the day of a stranger. I also liked how you utilized the entire body of the basilisk, like having the daughter scrub the basilisk's scales and clean his feathers. I wonder how the daughter's siblings reacted to her story. Since this took place over several days, did the daughter go back home each night to her family? I'm curious to know how if her sisters were surprised, disgusted, or somewhere in between by what the daughter had to go through. What if we got to hear a bit more from the other daughters' perspectives? I feel as though this situation affects everyone in the family, not just the daughter. Good job on this story!

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    1. Hi Nathan!
      Thank you very much!
      Those are all definitely interesting hypotheticals that could be explored.

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  4. Hi CJ!
    I read your first version of the three roses earlier this semester! When I reread your newer version in your portfolio I noticed the minor changes you added. I think the changes made the story flow better. I also like how you chose images that were all clipart to keep the story consistent. The images definitely bring the monsters alive. Again, I love your version of the Clever, Brave, and Wise. I also read that story earlier in the semester. It's very good, and I enjoyed reading it again. All your details that you added made the story more enjoyable in my opinion. For example, the color of the hair and the dragon being the bride were my favorite additions/changes. I love the idea of compiling stories involving bonds with monsters. Very Cool! Can't wait to see what other stories you add to your portfolio.

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    1. Hi Helen!
      I'm glad to hear you enjoyed both of the stories!
      Yeah, I feel that managing to get all clipart really helped bring that story together in a nice way.
      Thank you very much! The hair colors were a fun detail to do, and I'm glad you liked my twist on the ending!
      It makes me very happy to hear you like my portfolio concept, I hope you enjoy the future stories I add to the portfolio!

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  5. Hi CJ!
    I love to read your story - the three roses! It is easy to understand and impressive! I would say that several sentences in the story are fantastic and I love them. For example, "for roses, once picked, are destined only to wilt and die", it is true that the sentence is concise and short. However, I would like to connect the situations with reality when I read it. Hopefully, there will have more sentences like this in your following stories!
    The imagines are also important to your portfolio! They help me to imagine some scenes in my mind when I read the story. Also, they could help me to understand what exactly those monsters look like.
    However, it is a little abrupt when you said that the monster turns into a human and the little daughter decides to marry him. It would be better if you could add some detailed explanation at that part.

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    1. Hi Taiwei!
      I'm very glad to hear you enjoyed my stories!
      It makes me very happy to see that you had particular lines that stuck out to you!
      Hopefully other lines in my future stories strike you like that one did :)
      The ending could definitely be something to add more to if I had extra room for the story.

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  6. Hi CJ! I am back again! I loved this weeks story! For starters, I loved the changing of the characters. I think sometimes it is important to see a male character as the one in need of saving, it adds an extra element to it! Especially with your ending decision! I loved that in this retelling, he got to save himself. This eliminates the weird "well now you have to marry me" of these sorts of stories. I think it was really nicely written. I liked how you included the dialogue. It helped move the story along while still allowing the reader to be engaged. I, also, loved the detail you put into the story. Sometimes as I am writing my stories it can seem like I am putting too much in, but then I imagine someone who has never heard this story before and I put in that extra adjective. I appreciate that you do the same thing because I had never heard this story but I felt as though I had! I look forward to reading the rest!!

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    1. Hi Brynlee!
      Welcome back!
      I'm very glad to hear you enjoyed this story as well!
      Details and dialogue can definitely help to make a story flow and engage the reader, so good on you for working to include detail in your work!

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  7. Hello Cj,
    I am glad I found someone else doing a Portfolio! You did a great job of keeping the site visibly pleasing while at the same time not making it overwhelming to look through. I thought that you choice in pictures was extraordinary on the 3 roses story, they complimented each other very well. I have not had the pleasure to read the original to which that story is based off, but you gave great details form me to be able to follow along without reference. Once again, the simplicity of the story was intriguing and kept my attention to the very end, and to me that is the greatest compliment a writer can receive. I love the project and bid you good luck with the remaining stories, I hope they are as good as this one. I look forward to reading more from you in the following weeks.

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